英语是通向国外的桥梁,下学期就要成为高三学子的你,是否还在为自己的英语作文而烦恼呢?高考英语作文是英语中拉分与提高分数的重要一城,必须做到不容有失,以下是考试啦网小编为你准备的高考英语作文赏析——Our Spring Outing(附名师点评)
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【试题回放】假设你是红星中学高三一班的学生李华,为校刊英语园地写一篇题为“Our Spring Outing” 的英文稿件。 请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序,叙述上周你们班从准备春游到春游结束的完整过程。
注意: 词数不少于60.
提示词: 游乐园amusement park 垃圾箱bin
Last Thursday, we had a class meeting to discuss where to go for our spring outing. We came up with several choices such as going boating, climbing a mountain, and going to an amusement park. Finally, we decided to go mountain climbing.
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本情景作文的内容要点如下:1.讨论;2.爬山;3.检拾别人的垃圾;4.投放垃圾。内容要点可用不同方式表达。本文覆盖了所有内容要点,较好地完成了试题规定的任务。其中,写作主题突出,详略得当,应用了较多的语法结构和词汇,而且有效的使用了语句间的连接成分,使全文机构紧凑。本文叙述清楚,描写细致,准确运用了很多富有表现力的词和句型,例如:“set off early”,“enjoyed the warm sunshine and a beautiful view”, ”were shocked to see litter here and there “等,将活动的情形很形象地描述了出来。
积累卡片英汉互译
好词1 set off 出发2. litter n.废弃物3.respectively adv.分别地
好句1.While climbing the mountain, we enjoyed the warm sunshine and a beautiful view .
在爬山时,我们享受着温暖的阳光和美丽的风景。
1. However, when we reached the top, we were shocked to see litter here and there, such as bottles and banana peels.
然而,当我们登上山顶,被眼前的一幕惊呆了:瓶子和香蕉皮这样的废弃物到处都是。
评析:细节描写,生动形象。“shock”一词也用得生动传神。